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Some of you may have heard that Colin Harvey passed away suddenly last week. He was more recently published by Angry Robot. I had the pleasure of meeting Colin at Anticipation, the World Science Fiction Convention in Montreal, Canada, in 2009. His book Wintersong was launched there, along with the imprint and the books of my friend, Kaaron Warren and Lauren Beukes. I recall also Andy Remic’s Kell’s Legend may have featured at the launch.

Sometimes you meet someone and they touch you in a way you remember and cherish. Colin was one of these people for me. I didn’t know him well, but I managed to keep in random contact via Facebook and Twitter and he came to have dinner with us when we were in Bath last year.I was very impressed because he caught a bus. We also caught up with him in Bristol, when the lovely Cheryl Morgan organised for us to attend the William Gibson talk.

He was cheerful, gracious, supportive and a lovely man. He was a talented writer. In our talk over dinner and wine last year, we learned a bit more about Colin. Mostly it was that he was happy and doing what he loved. (and surviving on a low income doing what he loved)  He was published with Angry Robot and had another book out, Damaged Time. He had retired from work some time before and was studying creative writing. He was editing an anthology, Dark Spires, with Cheryl Morgan and he lived with his wife Kate.

I read Wintersong after worldcon and wrote a review of it on my livejournal blog.

Here is the text of it:

Winter Song is an sf novel published by the new Harper Collins imprint Angry Robot.

Karl Allman lives in a post human world. His body is augmented by nanophytes and he can interface with artificial intelligence. Its a galaxy where humans terraform other worlds to make new colonies and where there are factions and wars. Karl’s ship is attacked and he crashes to the iceworld of Ishiemur, a failed terraformed planet, inhabited by Icelandic colonists. That Karl survives his spectacular landing is the first amazing thing, then that he survives his injuries is another.

Bera, a young girl, mourning the loss of her new born child, tends to Allman as he recovers. Living in a small community, her pregnancy, has drawn criticism and scorn from the other women in the settlement and her foster father, Ragnar. Icelandic traditions, culture and legends loom large in this colony and as it has been isolated for long in has devolved as well and technology is rudimentary. Scarcity of food and resources is a fact of life for the colonists. Most of the flora and fauna are toxic to humans and Allman is required to work off his debt, the food and care he received while recuperating. For some reason, Allman alternates between being rational and being another person, who the locals name Loki. He is either mad or a seer. It soon becomes apparent that Ragnar is not ever going to be happy with repayment and Allman has to make a choice to escape and send an SOS.

What follows is Allman and Bera’s journey across this harsh world to find a way to send a signal. Ragnar will not relent and the chase is on.

Winter Song is a fairly fast and satisfying read. Allman’s plight and Bera’s drew me in and I found I was fascinated with the relationships Bera manages in her claustrophobic community. As the story unfolds, Bera comes to terms with rape and I think Colin handles the feminist themes here quite well and sensitively. There are things that Bera would like to do and cannot because she is female in a strongly patriarchal society. She is also an intelligent and sensitive character that hides a secret to keep the peace and in doing so injures herself. Winter Song is the story of how Bera finds herself and learns to love. In this sense, Allman is an agent for change. He crashes into the planet and into the lives of the Isheimuri people and that change expands like a snowball rolling down a hill. In some ways, Allman is too indestructible and that can lessen the impact of his suffering and need.

Not all the threads of the story are tied together by the end. Trolls are examined and analysed in a satisfying way, but the legendary shapeshifters disappear from the narrative. Ragmar undergoes a change after much carnage. Yet I think it is Bera that has been most affected.

The Icelandic setting added a layer of fantasy-like dressing, horses, sword fighting and legends and gods and the cultural layers also represent as authentic. I felt that Colin had done his research. The prose style was strong and didn’t draw attention to itself and there was the occasional nice turn of phrase.

I bought Damaged Time and will read it now.

 

Here are some photos from that fantastic convention in Montreal. Colin with my partner, Matthew Farrer at the book signing table.

Colin and Matthew booksigning

Here is one of Colin, signing book plates. As his book had only just launched there weren’t many people lining up.

Colin signing

And one last one with Lee Harris, Editor, Angry Robot Books.

I’ll remember you Colin. Rest in peace.

Colin and Lee

Well that was interesting. In less than 24 hours after dealing with the last MS, my mother had a major seizure and fall and I’ve been at the hospital for most of the time and on leave from work. After thinking I’d be planning a funeral, my mother’s prospects have improved. She even opened her eyes today quite a number of times. So I’m feeling very positive about her prognosis.

Regarding manuscripts. My final tally was 13 recommends as number 14 became a represented ms and goes direct to the editors. I found that out after reading it and telling the author I was going to recommend it. It was a good read so I can’t complain really.

Since finishing reading I caught myself dreaming I was reading an ms. I guess it will take me a while to recover and adjust to living without having to read on such a large scale and with such a concentrated effort.

So what did I recommend? I can’t give you specifics and you have to remember I read fantasy mostly.

I recommended one SF novel.
I recommended one trad fantasy/ steam punk meld
I recommended a three of traditional fantasies
I recommended three contemporary/urban fantasies
I recommended one horror/thriller type novel
I recommended one new weird type detective alternate future
I recommended one food fantasy (my term)
I recommended one jungle fantasy (my term)
I recommended one dark traditional fantasy (nice and nasty)

For those of you interested in where these authors are from, I’m done a quick count. However, I read manuscripts from all over the world, including South America and South Africa.

  • Australia – one
  • USA – four
  • Canada – five
  • Britain – three

However, I did notice two Australian’s in Amanda’s blog post.

So what did these very different mss have in common?

  • Good execution, some amazingly well-written with very little ms errors.
  • Original slant/setting almost all had something like this, or if it didn’t it was so well done that I couldn’t pass up.
  • Good pacing. I think they all had that, most to a high degree.
  • Intensity of character, or at a minimum well drawn characters.
  • Minimal backstory/info dumping, or at least well positioned and timely
  • A mixture of dark, nasty, and some were optimistic. I tended to pick dark and gritty but not exclusively.

For the mss I passed up. I think I provided some level of comment on all full mss. Sometimes those comments were rather lengthy, some were shorter. In any event, I tried to elaborate on what the issue was. Remember sometimes it was just fit. In a couple of cases, I passed on perfectly good manuscripts because of the current list of publications and proposed publications for Angry Robot Books. This was sad for me and more so for the authors. I do trust those mss to find a home soon.

Some general issues in the second lot of full mss. Pacing was one. For example, the opening was nice and tense and then it would dissipate. This happened for a number of reasons:
back story

  • General slowness of action due to style of story telling, amount of detail, or nothing happening to advance the plot
  • Issues with world building as in doesn’t stand up or push the boundaries of credibility or reasonableness
  • End of story is world’s apart from beginning, so set up at the beginning and lack of foreshadowing (I now realize this is still a problem in one of my mss)
  • Introducing too many characters too quickly and without adequate context to settle the reader, allow the reader to care about the character or just adding to the general confusion
  • Difficult story arcs, which cause structural issues for the story sometimes leading to predictability or foundering of the story
  • Not ready for publication yet, that is the story has a beginning, middle and end but the prose is rough in a number of places, scenes have not been exploited for the action or emotional impact, or more generally a high level of errors, typos, wrong words, missing words, incomplete sentences, untidy, unfinished, perhaps even slackness in a couple.
  • Unoriginal in many ways, introducing well worn tropes without introducing something new.

Some of the recommended mss were very well polished. I read them with a sense of awe, particularly the care taken with the world building and the polish to the prose. In reading them, I felt that I had something to aspire to in my own mss.

I’m not sure I have much else to say, rather than repeating what an amazing opportunity reading submissions was and also at the same time, very intense and draining.

Writing comments is not always easy. Sometimes it takes a while to actually pin point what the issues may be and where improvements could be made. I admit to once or twice having a general feeling of an ms not being quite right and then considering it for days to work out what I might say. Responding to an ms requires analysis and creativity. It is not something I could do lightly or while I watched tele, but required concentration and immersion.

So best of luck to those recommended. I will keep an ear out for those who make it to publication. For the rest of us, it’s back to the computer, back to our mss, and continue to write and refine our work.

I’m hoping to put up a few interviews with editors in the coming months and with authors who use first readers, sometimes called beta readers. I’m hoping these interviews will be useful in providing insight into the editing/writing world.

Next up some memories and photos of Colin Harvey, who passed away last week.

With regard to reading for Angry Robot Books, I am half way through the second last MS and will probably start the last one tomorrow and finish it sometime over the weekend. Today I sent out a few rejections and a couple of good news emails on further recommendations to Angry Robot Books. These two shift the gender balance further as both are male. That is 14 recommended manuscripts for the editors. I’m not sure whether they hate me or love me for sending so many. I’ll be asking for feedback from them eventually.

After reading the last of the MSs, I have to trawl through my submissions table (running at about 10,000 words) to find the names of those I said I’d recommend to the editors. I’m not sure how many of these there were-probably a handful. By being recommended they will be able to submit to Angry Robot in future, either with a new project or an improved one.

Yesterday, Angry Robot Books’ author, Colin Harvey died from a massive stroke. I was very upset about this and I really liked him. He was a great bloke. I’m will do a tribute post to him when I’m not so teary. I’m also going to have a drink with Kaaron Warren to say goodbye to Colin, later in the week. I can’t imagine what a horrible shock it must be for his wife, Kate, nor how she is coping.

I started my advanced editing course today and spoke to our lecturer. It seems I can use some of the content on this website as part of my editing journal. I am very pleased about that considering I have dedicated nearly six months of my life to reading submissions and then writing about the experience. Next week, my house may even get cleaned, but there are no guarantees! Reading submissions for almost all my spare time is kind of like an internship, I think. However, not completely as there were many editing related tasks I didn’t do, like write blurbs, design assignments, commissioning covers, marketing etc. So I don’t have too many tickets on myself.

I also think the insights gained, including the substance of the posts about the issues in manuscripts, will help me when I edit Claire McKenna’s novella for my major assignment.

For the record, I work in my day job for 30 hours per week, that is four days full time. I spend a lot of time stressing about my job in my spare time. Sometimes, I also stressed about Mss (including dreaming that I’m still reading them when I’m asleep) at the same time, which makes me a bit stressy and wakeful. Right now I’m feeling relaxed.

So next week, when everything is wrapped up, I think I will post some thoughts on reading submissions and maybe do an overview of the qualities of the MSs I did recommend, in a general kind of way, it being private and between the authors and Angry Robot.

I also want to thank Angry Robot for allowing me the opportunity to partake of this development opportunity. I know I whinged and moaned about it and it was so very hard at times to keep going, but I think all growth opportunities are painful in some way. I definitely learned so much and I’m quite excited about finishing off the editing component of my post graduate certificate in profession writing and using the insights I have gained in honing my editing eye.

I’ve just recommended two more mss to the editors. That means the gender scales have shifted somewhat. I was fifty fifty before but the two latest are males. That’s 12 in total, which is rather a lot. I guess that reflects my earlier comments that there is a lot of good stuff in the submissions pile and some of that must be work that did not get picked up in previous years with the GFC and the continuing uncertainty in the publishing sector.

I am currently reading an SF ms and I have six more mss to go. I’m reading them as the mood takes me, leaving the longest one for last. The two that I recommended today I have been sitting on for a week or two.

I am feeling rather chipper as one day I might clean my house when all this is done and dusted. I am also in an MS reading mood, having written two reports and given two authors good news. On the downside, I also gave two authors not so good news. I so wish I could get this finished by next weekend.

I have less then ten manuscripts left to read and I’ve reached burnout. I used my day off on Wednesday, which is usually my writing day, to read mss, hoping to get ahead, perhaps even daydreaming about finishing up this weekend. However, I just can’t do it. I had to have a break and give my eyes and brain a break.

So those of you waiting don’t have to worry that I’m fatigued or not in the right frame of mind to read. I just can’t read at all when I’m like this. I have to take a break, do something else. Like maybe watch a DVD, drink a glass of wine. Part of my problem could be that I’m still recovering from this chest infection. Darn coughing is so annoying. So this weekend I am hoping to get through two mss but I’m not pushing it.

Anyway despite the delay I’ll finish by the end of the month. I have the guilts so bad that when I’m reading and think I need a nap I dream I am still reading the ms. The words are in my mind until some part of me says-you know you’re dreaming this. This isn’t the story and I wake up and keep reading because I have to get to the end so I cannot dream about reading. I reckon that makes me kinda weird.

Another weekend with manuscripts. It was raining so that’s not so bad. Manuscript number 39 took me three evenings to get through (Wed, Thurs and Fr). Number 40 took most of Saturday and number 41 Saturday evening and all of Sunday. I’m starting number 42 tonight but going to watch a movie first.

The next few MSs are quite long, over 100,000 words. At this stage I am pretty sure I’ll be done by the end of the month. I am hoping for sooner though.

I have 12 to go! That is if I don’t find an extra one. Number 40 was one that I hadn’t written down so my 53 turned to 54.

Finished ms number 32 and starting ms number 33. Things are going well. I wonder if I can finish number 34 before the weekend ends. 20 mss left to go.

Status update

Currently reading ms number 31.
Dragon wine cutback broke the 150,000 word barrier, which means I’ve cut 17,000 words so far about one third of the way in.

Knackered tonight so relaxing with a ms.

I had a interesting day yesterday. I did not read an MS, or start to read an MS. I feel like I’m shirking but not reading is certainly allowing my mind to recharge. I’ll start full MS number 31 tonight.

So I continued with snipping away at Dragon Wine. This morning I start with 152,342 words (actually I already cut something this morning but I’ll talk about that). That is approximately 15,000 words less that the original word count (167,200). I’m aiming for 130,000 words but I’d be happy with 140,000.

I’m now starting on part two and the introduction of a new set of characters. This is a bit refreshing to start with this new lot of characters.

Last night as I tried to sleep I thought about a scene that I identified yesterday as not doing it’s job. I cut it back substantially, but kept its backbone. Then I thought about it some more. You know this scene has the best descriptive writing in the book. I love it. People who have read that bit have gone wow. I added this scene during a revision a while back, back when I was looking to flesh out the world, ensure I had the detail and to make it sound more real. Originally I had this group of characters get to a point, suggest they are going somewhere else and then pick up their thread then. You know when they are already there and it’s in the middle of the action. The scene I added was how they got from there to there. I might have had some plot discussion points in there, but basically nothing happens. They move through an amazing geothermal landscape, scale a gorge, confirm their thoughts that the garrison was attacked and who their opponents are and think about where the thing they are following went. That’s it. Very pretty, some character insights, but nothing important happens. So this morning I gritted my teeth and cut it all. Phew! It was hard. I thought about restructuring so I could keep that one paragraph of description but didn’t. I cut it.

I have writer friends who do up spread sheets and work how who has the point of view in which chapters and change it if it isn’t balanced, work out the percentage of action and narrative etc. This type of detail analysis I don’t usually do. I sort of play it by ear. However, I can see now that this sort of micro examination of a novel can help to refine it to its lovely bones. After I’ve done this cut back and see what word count I’ll end up with. I’ll go back to the start and then look at it at sentence level to see if I can write a few things more succinctly. I’m doing that at the moment on this pass through but I think it will be worth doing again, to tighten the prose. Then there will be another read through and maybe a pass by unsuspecting beta readers. It’s time to kick this baby out of the door. Revising Dragon Wine was one of my goals for the year. I think I can see me doing it now. As for drafting another novel, well my day job is going to impact on that. I’ll be report writing right up to Christmas. That is very draining. However, I do have a writers’ retreat planned for January, where I am hoping to achieve another 80,000 words. (I touch type btw). Report writing at work usually sets me up for critical thinking though which is good for editing.

Yesterday while playing with my ipad I found a tutorial on WordPress. So you will see I have a contact form now. I believe that will email me.

I’m still reading mss, but today and tomorrow I’m taking a break from work and assessing mss. I’m a bit tired and I really do not get a kick out of sending rejections. I worry, too, that my comments may come across as nit picky, when the author of the ms has to deal with the rejection. It is hard to tell whether someone is ready for feedback. I’m thinking if someone got a full request then they should be ready…I’m hoping they are ready and see them as a way forward.

In my ten years or so of writing I’ve been rejected many times for various mss, short stories and novels and I’ve felt the whole gamut of feelings from being close to tears to preparing myself for bad news beforehand so it don’t kick so bad. Sometimes I couldn’t help getting my hopes up only to have them dashed. The thought that the elusive email or phone call from an editor or agent saying they loved my work is a fading fantasy. I’ve had friends get that email and I’m just close, not quite good enough. (not necessarily a good profession to aspire to when you have low self-esteem, though these days my self-esteem problems are under control).

So here I am grasping hold of the shreds of hope, revising the novel that I have faith in. Today, I’ve been able to put to use some of the insights from ms reading and apply it to myself. Do I do the common errors that I noted while reading? Most definitely. Today I cut back, restructured and rewrote a chapter that I had trimmed last week. However, I missed a few things. Then I went back to check something and found a continuity error. I’m trimming back and I can see the discipline of word count and succinctness are really useful things to help focus dialogue and make me question whether I need all those character thoughts and all that description. I also start to question whether I like the sound of my own voice. Snip. Snip. Snip.

It’s around 11.00am and I’m down to 158,798 words (last tally was 159,283). I’m trimming and it’s hard work. It takes concentration, some skill and perseverance.